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PostPosted: June 6th, 2021, 6:51 pm 
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Hi guys. Long time. Here is a new story starring the one and only Ghostbusters. Hope you enjoy.

"Class, we have an end of school year visitor today," said a teacher in a school. "Please welcome fellow Ghostbuster, Dr. Ray Stantz."

"YEAH, GHOSTBUSTERS!!" cheered the class as Ray stands up in front of the room.

"Thank you, thank you," said Ray. "For the rest of the day, we'll have a great discussion about Ghost Business and whatnot."

"Tell us about Gozer!" cried a boy.

"And the giant Stay Puft Marshmallow Man!" cried a girl.

"Aw, come on," said Ray, jokingly. "Aren't you tired of that story already?"

"It's better when you tell it, Dr. Ray!" said another boy.

Ray blushes.

"Well, not to brag, but I do tell the best stories," he said. "Okay, you win. I'll tell you my perspective of the Gozer story."

"GOZER! GOZER!" chanted the class.

"Settle down, kids!" said the teacher.

"Sorry!" said the class.

"Alright, it was a few summers ago. Dr. Peter Venkman just met this woman named Dana Barret, who just had a paranormal encounter...."

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"...and the rest was Ghostbuster history," concluded Ray.

"Alright! Cool! Excellent!" cheered the class.

"Now, any questions or comments?" asked Ray.

"What does it take to be a Ghostbuster?" asked another boy. "I wanna be one when I grow up."

"Well, you need practice," said Ray. "Patience, because growing up takes time. And if you want to keep in touch and support us, come by our HQ later this afternoon. All of you are welcome to come by."

Another kid raises her hand. "My mom has a crush on you, Dr. Ray. She has this painting of you guys in her office. She let me take this with me today to show it off."

She shows the painting of the Fettucine painting of the Ghostbusters crew, which made Ray blush red.

"Now where did she get that?" Ray asked jokingly.

"I don't know, but she thinks you're hot in this painting. Rrrrow!"

"Okay, okay, that's enough!" Ray said in humiliation , running over to the girl, making her hide the picture. "Tell her thanks, but I'm already seeing another woman."

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Ray arrives back with a few boys from the school to the Firehouse HQ.

"Here we are, the Ghostbusters' HQ," said Ray. "Yeah, it's not big, but, uh..."

"So what? It still looks pretty cool," said a boy named Fred, staring at a Proton Pack.

"Dude," said the other boy named Simon. "Don't touch! You want to mess things up?"

"I'm not touching, I'm looking."

"Hey, Ray," greeted Venkman, coming out of his little office. "I see you bought company."

"Hi, I'm Fred. This is Simon."

"I'm Dr. Peter Venkman, how are ya?"

"Thrilled to be here," said Simon. "We're here to be GB supporters. It's the best we can do to apply for a job here."

"Oh, you wanna join the crew?" asked Venkman.

"Yeah, but we're too young," said Fred.

"Maybe so, but we are starting a Junior Ghostbusters program this summer," said Venkman. "So, maybe you can start your training early."

"Wow, really?" asked Fred.

"Why not? I think kids should help out the GB family. Just as long as they're safe and all. The equipment can be dangerous."

"Relax," said Ray. "Egon's working on a new junior sized proton pack that's kid friendly and GB working condition."

"Anyway, you'll need parent's permission to join in," said Venkman. "In fact, you may want them to come to the classes just in case you get hurt or something."

"Good call, Venkman."

"And remember: Don't cross the streams. I'll explain that in class."

"Hey, guys, where are ya?"

"Over here, Slimer!" said Ray. "Fred, Simon, this is our mascot, Slimer."

Slimer floats over to the boys with a slimy handshake. "How ya doin'?"

"I've heard stories about you. You're always hungry."

"I have an extra Milky-Way bar if you want it," said Simon, handing the candy bar to Slimer.

"Thanks, buddy."

"Okay, well, we better get home for lunch. Bye, GBs."

"Hey, you've just got here, silly!" said Venkman. "Lunch is on us. We'll call your parents to let them know where you are and stuff."

"Oh, thanks, Venkman," said Fred.

"What are you in the mood for? Don't tell me... Burger King."

"Do you have any Spaghetti-os?"

"With or without meatballs?"

"Doesn't matter."

"Alrighty, let's eat."


More to come. Hope you've enjoyed what we got so far.

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PostPosted: June 7th, 2021, 9:07 am 
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I had to suppress a reflexive eye twitch at the phrase "Junior Ghostbuster", but other than that an interesting start.

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"Tell us about Gozer!" cried a boy.

"And the giant Stay Puft Marshmallow Man!" cried a girl.

"Aw, come on," said Ray, jokingly. "Aren't you tired of that story already?"


Lol...a little commentary on Sony's over-reliance on Gozer cross-references in recent years?

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PostPosted: June 7th, 2021, 9:25 am 
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Well, sorry about that cringe about Jr GBs. Not my best work, but a work in progress. Not sure about the Gozer thing, but I thought that it should be mentioned briefly.

Ray seems to be a popular GB in my stories. Just beginning to notice that. :ray:

Any other thoughts? :) Again, open to suggestions.

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"You guys sure about starting a kids GB program?" asked Winston.

"It's my idea, basically," said Venkman. "I just want kids to help us out."

"These kids can help us bust some ghosts," said Ray, smoking a cigarette.

"Ray, I thought you've quit smoking!" said Winston.

"Uh..." Ray couldn't find an excuse.

"Come on, Ray," said Venkman. "Smoking causes cancer. You don't want that. Hand over the ciggy."

Ray groans and gives Venkman the cigarette to throw away.

Then, Egon and Janine and Slimer enter the lab with two kids named Leo and Marvin.

"Meet our two new little recruits," said Egon. "They've even made their own uniforms."

"Stylish," said Venkman. "Ready for next week, kidos?"

"You bet, Dr. uh...." Leo can't remember this guy's name.

"Peter Venkman. Nice to meet ya."

"You, too. Hello again, Dr. Ray," said Marvin.

"Hey, I think I remember you..." said Ray.

"You came to my birthday last year."

"Oh yeah? Was it the one where the kids wanted He-Man instead of me?"

"No. Did that really happen?"

"Yeah..."

"Ouch."

"But I take it my party was better?"

"Did kids throw stuff at me?"

"Nah. They wanted you to hang with us. Eat some of the cake. Even hand out the presents."

"Nice," said Ray, smiling. "Great to see you, buddy."

"Oh, uh, my sister would like to be a GB, too. But she's not sure if girls are allowed..."

"You kidding? Janine here is an occasional GB," said Venkman. "So, yeah. Girls are welcome."

"Perfect. Can't wait to tell her."

"Thanks for giving me credit, Peter," said Janine, blushing.

"Anytime, Janine," said Venkman. "I assume you want a raise for that?"

"Well..."

"Okay, okay," said Venkman, laughing. "One check with a hundred smackers coming your way."

"Thanks."

"Okay, before you go," said Egon. "I want to see if you can handle the Proton Packs. Remember, these aren't toys."

"What are we? Kindergarten kids? We know these aren't toys, silly," said Marvin.

Egon laughs. "Okay. But still, you have to be careful. Interesting fact, if he were still in Krypton, if you shot Superman with these things, you could slice him up like bologna."

"Cool!" said Leo.

"Okay," said Marvin. "Now my mind is fully blown."

"Remember, no crossing the streams," said Winston.

"Or else it'll cause bad stuff," said Ray. "Let's leave it at that."

"Got it," said the boys.

"Slimer, get ready," said Egon.

"Not again!!" cried Slimer.

"Come on, we'll let you out when it's over," said Ray.

"But it has itty-bitty living space, guys!" complained Slimer.

"Calm down, you won't be in there for over 30 seconds."

"Fine, let's get this over with..."

See the boys test their busting skills next time. Hope you like it. Not my best work, but it's an okay story, right?

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